Monday, July 28, 2008

And then....

The beautiful orange streaks across the sky beckoned her thoughts, and so did her gaze look yonder. She had just come back from a beautiful play, one which she had initially refused to go for. Her friend had insisted, saying she had not stepped out for ages, and she might need the change.She had finally given in and had also enjoyed every moment of her day out. She had felt one with the breeze, the green of the lush trees and also the nip in the air reminded her of the lovely monsoon winds.
She stared out of the window, trying to catch the silver line bordering the dark clouds in the orange sky. It was a fusion of colours, just like her innermost thoughts. She knew in a few minutes all her smiles would dissolve. She had tried talking to her friends about him. But then he was a different persona in front of them. How could she convince them , that what they saw in him was not what he was. He turned into a monster , a person, who couldnt handle negative criticism, someone who wanted repeated assurances that he was good, even if it meant it was a lie. How could she tell them, that she walked on egg shells while he was around. Not knowing
which action of hers, or words would anger him? She hoped he worked late, tonight too, she could sleep peacefully knowing there would be no arguments seeping into the night. She prayed for courage , strength and the guts to voice out her feelings.
But then " “things are not always as they appear”, and she knew only too well the repurcursions if her efforts backfired!
She looked on and on, into the grey of the night!

Written in response to the prompt at Matinee muse.

49 comments:

Joy said...

Good take on the prompt and a thought provoking post on ways of life...

brocasarea said...

hmm....by the way who is this guy??

ceedy said...

is this based on the prompt in quotes...

very well executed...

Balu said...

Hi Prats -- Sharply expressed the feelings of a woman going thru an unsuccessfull marriage.
I'd love to hear your opinion on what you think a woman should do when confronted with such a situation. Whether she should voice out her opinion bravely or should she suppress her feelings and suffer for the sake of the relationship?

Suma said...

wow!!! very beautifully written!!! i like the way u described the sky and her thoughts...

Prats said...

@joy :) thank you. Yes occurances that go ignored.

@broca The guy would be her partner.

@ceedy Yes, the prompts at Matinee muse...I had forgotten to mention that, now i've done it, thanks to you :D
Thank you

@Balu Bingo!! You've read this well. IMO the woman should learn to voice out her opinion. She need not suffer someone else's worngdoings..but there are many who stay silent, not wanting to hurt others or either for want of no strength
Thanks for coming out here

Prats said...

@suma Thanks...:) Sometimes its always nature that reflects a persons thoughts...uncanny but it happens

rantravereflect/ jane said...

hey babe.. yeh, going back to a home fulla arguments is teh most unbearable life to lead, be it a amn or a woman..

i think one 's gotat to try to make things work, n if after all teh efforts, one can't see eye-to-eye, one's jus gotat pack y abags n move.. there's no point in consistent suffering.. it only ruins that one chance ya have in life :)

beautifully written babe..

the beautiful colors n how they would dissolve.. awesome melancholy!

WhatsInAName said...

Beautifully expressed.
I have seen this happening to a friend of mine :( She is a divorcee now!

Veens said...

amazing ... seriously!

i like the colors... and the shades of thoughts

like the way yu have worded her thoughts!

nicely done girl! loving it :)

--xh-- said...

u hv beautifully expressed the anguish of a tormented mind. a very well written post and thoughtfully expressed emotions :)

Prats said...

@rantravereflect **there's no point in consistent suffering.. it only ruins that one chance ya have in life :)**

Very true...and its better to be happy than sorry.
Thank you :)

Prats said...

@WIAN I am sure she is happier now, than before...

Thank you :)

@veens...hey girl!! thank you ..it happens at times when the outside reflects our innermost thoughts...and it just went in here in these lines..

Prats said...

@xh thanks :)

ceedy said...

Ok kewl...

Just a q to the writer...

what is it thats holding this girl back and not seek the rainbow?

kids? society? fear? apprehension?

any thoughts? or leave it to our imagination

Preethi said...

very well expressed and wonderful take on the prompt!!

Rambler said...

you know I was more worried about the guy..because for such a person am sure he would have had a tough time to find someone who can put up with is anger..and then when he looses that person, even though he is the cause for the loss, am sure he would be left devastated.

Ziah said...

Nicely written:)

Someday I wish I could find a brush that could paint away all the pain in people's hearts... but for that I'd need to find a brush called faith and a painter called God!:)

Sumana said...

It had been long that i read a beautiful story teller in you. Very nice.

brocasarea said...

@ prats...she must be so unfortunate!..:)

Compassion Unlimitted said...

To be honest this is a reality which happens for both genders.
Just last week it happened to one of my very close friends( a He ),even after 30 years of married life!difficult believe it right.
But what you have written,if just a story,has very crisply written and conveys the batterings of & in life
TC
CU

Ankur said...

really well executed, how can u guys do this yaar!! :)

btw... u r blogrolled! !:)

CheerS!!

Keshi said...

beautiful!


** It was a fusion of colours, just like her innermost thoughts


arent our whole lives like that...a dance with hues of emotions..


Keshi.

Lena said...

i like the way you expressed her thoughts and emotions, very beautifully written.

ceedy said...

hey

will you be willing to put a small blurb on your side bar to introduce the new collaborative blog - Ambrosia...

since we wont be visiting from there...this is the only way to spread the word...thanks

if ok let me know will send you a small blurb

Prats said...

@ceedy ...hey sure! No probs...just let me know the details and the know me how?? :D

ceedy said...

thanku thanku

yes will elt you know

we are in a process of designing a widget

as soon as it is ready will let you know with instructions...

Manasa said...

Lovely writeup :)

Ps said...

Why doesnt she get some friends of his to talk to him and make him see sense?
I feel bad for her.
Well written.
Cheers
preeti

ceedy said...

Hi,
Prats,

The widget for ambrosia is ready...the thing is since its an html code..i cant paste it here...


can you email me at chintandesai@gmail.com...

I can email you the code and instructions...

it will look like it is on my blog on the right

Veens said...

hiya girl!!

whats up? where art thou?!

Happy happy Friendship day !!

glad to have a friend like u!!

June said...

hi i am a new blogger. i was reading your profile, in the category favorite books, you have writen the following lines

Any paper with words typed on it.....its the smell of the paper and the feel that makes it even more readable...am I crazy???

This is really true with people who love to read. i have Khalid Husseni's Kite Runner in the form of an e-book, i read few chapters sitting on the PC. Its going to be a month i have read only few chapters.
my husband says "when you have the book on the PC, why do you want to buy it?" i was unable to convince him.i have given up reading it on the PC. Guess What's next?
Finally we have decided to by the book.

June said...

hi, I am a new blogger. I read ur posts when ever i get time. Today was reading your profile, in the category favorite books, you have writen the following lines

Any paper with words typed on it.....its the smell of the paper and the feel that makes it even more readable...am I crazy???

This is really true with people who love to read. i have Khalid Husseni's Kite Runner in the form of an e-book, i read few chapters sitting on the PC. Its going to be a month i have read only few chapters.
my husband says "when you have the book on the PC, why do you want to buy it?" i was unable to convince him.i have given up reading it on the PC. Guess What's next?
Finally we have decided to by the book.

Compassion Unlimitted said...

You too on a long break !
TC
CU

Solitaire said...

Domestic violence? Uggggh!

Madhumita. said...

Ah ... all about the complex things between men and women. They hurt each other and yet stay together. This too is love of a kind :).

sahana said...

you are tagged! try it!
and where are you! get back to the blog world, gurl!!!

ceedy said...

knock knock!!!!

Prats said...

@ceedy.. :d I'm back after a break!!! Thanks for being so patient with me.

Yes, certain uncertainties in the girls' life makes her want to maintain some secrecy and keep things to her self.
But would love to know what the readers think about this too...

Prats said...

@preethi Thank you :)

@rambler Thats a new dimension to the story...nice to know that there can be such a thought too...but do you think its right to actually sympathise with a person who is wrong, however hurt he may be?

Prats said...

@ziah Faith comes from within you and God is there holding out his hand to help you in your dreams. I'm sure you'll realise those dreams one day...

Prats said...

@sumana Thanks :D

@broca...Depends on how she works out this situation.

@CU so true...actually this is something that is more like emotional abuse...it can happen to anyone. And yes! It is just a story inspired from a person I know. Thanks

Prats said...

@ankur Thanks and we just respond with our thoughts to each prompt. Why dont you try it out sometime too...

and thanks for the roll....hope you'll have fun visiting :)

Prats said...

@keshi Thanks and yes! Its always a fusion....mixed emotions, and many times just silence

@lena Thank you :)

@ceedy...hey...now that i'm back, i'll be able to do that widget thingy for you...just let me know how to go about it ok??? I'm still rusty in the understanding dept.. ;)

Prats said...

@manasa thank you and welcome out here :)

@ps...She tries to, but i'm sure the self righteousness will just rise up and make him go all defensive...thanks :)

Prats said...

@veens....hey...sorry, i've been away. And wish you the same wishes too....you've been a wonderful friend too...

ceedy said...

OK kewl
if you dont mind...email me at

chintandesai@gmail.com

as it does not allow me to post "script" here...

will send you info...

and it will look like it is on my blog...

thanks :)

PS - I asked those questions - bcos like you told CU - I know a very close person going thru this...where when alone - all sorts of q's arise but moment among the significant other - reluctance/fear somehow takes precedence

Prats said...

@jun :D Nothing like a book!!! And i'm so glad you went ahead and bought the book.
Thanks for coming here...keep dropping in

@CU hmm...kind of...forced one at that...moving house, so kind of busy

Prats said...

@solitaire :(

@madhu...A strange one isn't it? Wonder what makes them stay on ...

@sahana..hey sure will take that up ..next time my brains start working :(

@ceedy yes!!!!! I'm baaaackkk....